The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are.On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

in recent times, the development of the
internet
had a big impact on the population, when the other hand still there are some people who think it can limit their habit to socialize. I completely agree with the
first
statement because the
internet
allows the community to have improvement. it is true that by using the
internet
we can expand our relations globally. for some folk who used the
internet
allowed them to find a friend in different countries.
for example
, the number of users of social media in Indonesia is increasing year by year. depending on
this
situation, the majority get new friends from other countries by connecting by text or video call.
moreover
, when they are connected with some society from China, they
are
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learning the culture and expanding their knowledge. in that case, the
internet
is bringing a lot of positive effects for the population.
on the other hand
, there
is
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some societies who argue that the
internet
is a key to limiting all activities in real life.
this
statement
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fully right, because if someone communicates with other people via the
internet
using some applications
such
as Whatsapp, line or zoom, it has improved their ability to talk with foreign people.
for instance
, when students in Indonesia have friends from Africa, they are using
the
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global language
such
as
english
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during the conversation. they not only socialise but
also
improve their skill in foreign languages. in a nutshell, I agree that the
internet
gives a lot of benefits to the nation because by using the
internet
they can expand relations, information, and
also
knowledge.
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