Schools should not force children to learn a foreign lauguage. To what extent do you agree with this statemtent?

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a foreign
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language
should not be
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subject for
children
. While I believe that
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foreign terminology in
schools
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some benefits to
children
,
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mentioned. On the one hand, it can take some advantages when learning a foreign
lauguage
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language
.
Firstly
,
children
can
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access
to
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culture
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of
orther
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other
countries.
In addition
, if
schools
create exchange visits to immerse
children
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another countries
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, it helps students have
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understanding
in
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their
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.
Secondly
, learning fluently a foreign
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language
could make opportunities for
children
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a job in the future.
Finally
, at
schools
children
can experience
with
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enjoyable websites about languages. Students can explore more in
language
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the language
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you
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learn.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons why it should not be compelled
children
to learn a foreign
lauguage
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language
.
Children
have to deal with
pressure
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of
schools
and family when learning.
This
way can make them more bored with
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and under the
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pressure
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they
also
learn ineffectively.
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Moreover
,
instead
of learning a foreign dialect,
children
choose
their
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subjects they want to
study
like art, music, maths, literature,
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etc
. Because of subjects they like, they will have
effort
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to
study
and
more
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successful in their studies process. In
conclucion
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conclusion
, if students want to go
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, they can learn a foreign
lauguage
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language
to support their knowledge and make chances of their life. But I think that
self-
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study
by means of choosing subjects you like avoid the pressure from other people is still
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good choice.
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