Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing taffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree. What measure do you think might be effective.
A segment of society believes that growing the cost of gasoline is
the
excellent way to solve larger traffic and pollution problems.I differ Correct article usage
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view will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph.
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the growing
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everyday
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increasing
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such
as people like
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travell
in the buses,train or metro etc. Correct your spelling
travel
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some people cannot afford the Add a comma
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price
of petrol because of their low monthly income.consequently
recently the war between Russia and Ukraine had more impact to high the cost of gas.
On the other side
there are many other measures which can Add a comma
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by the Change the verb form
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government
such
as government
should have to make a wide road to avoid Correct article usage
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the
traffic congestion.Another Correct article usage
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this
side government
should have to make strict rules against the traffic lights or on road sides
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the petrol
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prices
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government
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite