Some countries have legal ages at which people can drink. Other countries believe not have strict laws is a better policy. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

The majority of people believe that some restrictions on the age of drinking alcohol should be attached meanwhile other

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of society think that the absence of strict limitations is

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option.

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, who is right ? In

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consider that the legal age, which may be allowed the availability of drinking, has to establish. Unless

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adolescents have all the freedom they gained, they may obtain detrimental problems with health.

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generally consuming drinks is normal,consumption of unhealthy drinks at

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young age entails harmful consequences

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the reason that human lungs and heart may damage as result later.

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of society believe that those restrictions can cause evasion of rules. If adults forbid those extremely harmful drinks, the youth, who are sick of bans, will make an opposition,

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a consequence secret disobedience could

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. To illustrate, in most cases parents, who are enough strict with their children, are not aware of their children`s deeds.

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, adults should give them freedom, which is surely in enough quantity. From my viewpoint, I am in complete agreement with both sides, whose opinions are equally accurate.

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of both views, which were mentioned above, to keep society disciplined and healthy.

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the final analysis, balance, which is between overusing strict laws and

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amount of limits, must be maintained in light of the fact that avoid losing control over

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generation.