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Some people think that a person improves intellectual skills better when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree?

#people #person #skills #group #activities
Learning and improving personal skills is
one
 of the main
aspect
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 of each human and there
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 main ways of doing that. The majority of individuals believe that
,
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 working together is
one
 of the best
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 of achieving success and
improve
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 personal skills. I
am completely agree
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 with that, group
working
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 has a huge amount of beneficial influence
for
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person
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the person
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 and in
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 I will discuss
this
 viewpoint in a depth. Working independently means being able to focus on
one
 thing or project deeply and it
also
 helps
to
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people provide their perspective on what they need. Intellectual skills
arises
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 when learners will have some problems during doing difficult tasks, which he or she has never done before and during
the
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working hours they will try to get out
from
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 their difficulties
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 will start to understand and learn how to
work
 independently, perhaps
that is
 why some people choose
this
 idea.
However
, despite
of
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increasing
productivity
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 of learners by doing more
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, working with others has several benefits too. Doing group activities
such
 as school projects helps people to
work
 together effectively and there will not be any distractions during the working period. Helping each
others
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 - is the most important part of
this
 viewpoint.
For example
, if humans will
work
 together they will be able to finish the project in a short amount of time without having any issues, because there will not
work
 only
one
 person, no almost each individual try to show his or her skill as possible they can and by the way untwist their knowledge. To conclude, being in a big community means having more than
one
 knowledge, which means it improves each
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 minds too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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