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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is ? what measures can governments take to discorage people from using their cars?

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The economy has been growing all over the world since the
second
 part of the twenty century. Nowadays it is normal to have one or even more
cars
 in the family.
However
, it is agreed that due to increased numbers of
vehicles
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 our cities are moving toward a huge traffic jam collapse.
Which
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This
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 is why the possible
actions
 from the governments about
such
circumstance
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 will be discussed in
this
 essay.
Currently
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 it is usual to spend two and more hours in a traffic jam per day
for
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in
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 the modern world megapolis inhabitant.
For example
,
New-York
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New York
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 city residents
stuck
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are stuck
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 there
around
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 twelve days per year, which influence
to
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the
economy
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 growth of the area.
Moreover
,
such
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number
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a number
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 of
cars
 creates
the
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ecological problems for the metapolicies as well. Thereby the traffic congestion becomes one of the most important
issue
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 that ought to be solved by governments official in each big city. The measures for solving
such
 difficulties could be separated in two directions – restrictive and incentive.
For instance
, Singapore could be taken as a great example of prohibitive
actions
 which were taken by the officials. In
this
city
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the
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car usage is restricted for
few
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a few
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 days only during the week.
On the other hand
, the incentive measures are directed to discourage people from using their vehicles. Public transport development is a very good way to reduce
number
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 of private
cars
. To summarize I want to say that either restrictive
and
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 incentive
actions
 should be implemented by governments to achieve results.
Although
 prohibitive measures
such
an
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 additional taxes for
cars
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car
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 owners, increased parking
price
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prices
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, and so on, are more effective in a short period,
the
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they
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encourage
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actions
 ought to be made as well.
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