Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The map illustrates the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and
present
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the present
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. It is clear from the map that there are many things were replaced and removed in that period. In 1995 there was
forest
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a forest
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park which was
next
to farmland, but it is removed recently.
Furthermore
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lishing
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fishing
listing
porl
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pool
portal
port
is destroyed. On another hand, there are some places, which are built. Two houses are constructed in the
north-west
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northwest
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of
village
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the village
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, and a car park is added
next
to the hotel. Part of
forest
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the forest
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park is converted
to
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into
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tennis while
the
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another
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other
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part is demolished.
In addition
, farmland is moved to golf while the fish market which was
next
to the sea is replaced by apartments.
Furthermore
, the shop, which was opposite the fish market, is converted
to
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into
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restaurant
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a restaurant
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.
Although
there were many
changing
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changes
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, the café, the hotel, and the houses remain until now.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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