Some people believe that hard work and determination are important in achieving success.Many people on the other hand are of the opinion that other factors play a vital role. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
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apply
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person
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a person
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think that Fix the agreement mistake
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people
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live
. I will discuss both views and support my opinion with examples.
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with, every person
have
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achievement
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humans
consider
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considers
about
how to do Change preposition
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the
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their
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any work, it is more than likely individual cannot be Change preposition
in
prospering
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a prospering
the prospering
person
. Becuase
if we aspire Correct your spelling
Because
achievement
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step to do something. And at the same Change the article
the first
time
we have to prepare Add a comma
,time
ourself
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ourselves
to
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for
unsuccessfull
moments. Correct your spelling
unsuccessful
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occasions actually recall our aspirations which we did the best for them on the pitch. Some studies report that if Correct determiner usage
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a
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for
achievement
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in
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field. In my opinion, this
issue more
related to the individual's perseverance and commitment.
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is more
On the other hand
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period. If person
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a person
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is bored
the
rich family, some consider that he or she is Correct article usage
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very
lucky Add an article
a very
person
. Becuase
it is more than likely parent prefer more well-known school, Correct your spelling
Because
person
normally can attain better knowledge, can participate in some science olympiads which is organized on abroad. Add an article
a person
the person
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definitely will have a chance more than other peers. Add an article
A person
The person
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reasons will lead to understanding Correct determiner usage
These
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at in
in
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an
early
age period. Correct article usage
the early
Furthermore
, proximity
of the pupil will be wider.
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the proximity
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conclusion, I would prefer to choose Change preposition
In
being
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to be
hard-working
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a hard-working
person
. Because if person
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a person
decide
to Change the verb form
decides
being
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be
succesful
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successful
help
to approach Change the verb form
helps
to
the top of the mountain.Change preposition
apply
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite