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In recent years, some countries have experienced rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side.    This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

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 are rapid developments in these times in the
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economy
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 of some countries
this
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the
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 quality of
life
 in major
cities
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However
,the situation in unurban places is different where
life
 is steel hard and less developed. in
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 will
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address
 both the problems and
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solutions
.
to begin
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 are several
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 facing the
farmeing
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farming
areaes
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areas
,whereas
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 the same time
life
 becoming easy and
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modern
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cities
.the most complication is the imegartion of
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a young
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man
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 to
cities
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 are better
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jobs
 with better salaries.
for example
, working in
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the office
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 or in
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a resturant
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resturant
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restaurant
restaurants
 where work is
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much
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easer
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easier
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 than working in the
feald
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field
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edging
 the land to farm it.
moreover
,
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issue
issues
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issue
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services
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 are more developed and better in
cities
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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such
 as hospitals, schools,and
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others
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.
furhermore
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Furthermore
,
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 are several solutions that can be conducted to solve these problems.
firstly
, proved more
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jobs
 to the young
in
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 by
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opening
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 several
seveses
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services
business
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businesses
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 like
resurant
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restaurant
restaurants
 and offices.
secondly
, the
goverment
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government
 should
biuld
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build
 the most important
facilites
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facilities
 and they should
by
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be
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modrenis
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modern
as
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apply
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the same
of
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as
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 urban facilities
such
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counclude
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conclude
, the development
in
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 urban
cities
 made
the
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life
 in theme more attempting
although
this
coused
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caused
 neglecting of
life
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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,which is
also
 important for the economy of the
country
,
severl
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several
 issues have been
explaind
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explained
whith
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with
which
soluatins
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solutions
solution
 that could
reduse
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reduce
 the effect of these problems.
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