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"prevention is better than cure". Research and treating is too costly. so it would be better to invest in preventive measure. To what extend do you agree.

#prevention #cure #research #measure
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precaution. It is caused due to the lack of awareness. when they fealed
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 obstacle they understand the habitual method. I totally agree about a preventive measure which is needed for every human before any medication. Every year we
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 spend a lot of money on new development and prescript. At
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 time our medical sector is developing and they had taken new advanced
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 for any kind of illness.
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, in the covid ,19 we faced that,
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 affection happening by cross-contamination. If we maintain our personal behaviour like
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 anyone or anything. When you take it seriously
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 you will be safe 70% of covid 19 affection. Most
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people
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sincerity
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 the time research and treatment are important for
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 improvement and root cause analysis. If we aren't clarifying the problem, why it is creating human health hazards?
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 we should not take any antibiotics for future expansion. In the end
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my opinion is that precaution is more than better for
further
 treatment. We believe
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 essential for cost reduction in the human health sector.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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