Parents should encourage children to spend a list time in studies and more time in physics activities do you agree

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parents
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activities
rather
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academic work. I have elaborate concur side in forthcoming paragraphs To comment with agreement side of
this
phenomenally.
First
and foremost, students who are below 10 years, they do not have abilities for what think is good and wrong for them.
Additionally
, including starting age of
children
, they are mostly depending on their
parents
. And
children
follow their
parents
also
. So,
children
are becoming cause potatoes if their
parents
do not encourage them to spend quality time
in
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doing outdoor
activities
.And, it occurred many constitutions like, like effective on
children
's minds and
also
effective their nature and
also
children
can be
introvert
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for
whole
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life
.
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, only
do
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study
can be not beneficial for any
children
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for instance
one
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children
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child
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who only concentrate in
study
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the study
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for
while
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whole
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time. So, they cannot able to learn social skills and
not
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are not
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able to brief knowledge about the world and other people's nature and it can
be take
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many causes in
children
's future
life
. like,he or she could not able to communicate with
other
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others
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and could not
sufficient
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to
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make relationships with other
Secondly
, not only studying but
also
goods
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physical body is important for living
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goods
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life
.
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other
word
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, sitting in
at
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one
place for the long term causes many diseases like obesity and diabetes. And, by doing physical
children
can able to live
life
with the out any physical issues.
For example
,
one
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apply
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children
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child
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who
doing
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bought
study
and Outer
activities
, he or
she
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cannot only overcome
this
stress related
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to theirs
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theirs
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studying but
also
build their strong
body
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through some outdoor
activities
. For
exampal
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example
.swimming cycling and many other games. In conclusion, I fully support the view that
children
should be encouraged by their
parents
for
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children's
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good body strength and good
life
in childhood without any tension of
study
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