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We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

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It is said that
computers
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 are the future,but
is
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 good for
human
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the human
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 future? We are people of the new time.You don't need to be good at
computers
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 to find something,just open the website and search.
At
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 the
beginning
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 it seems to be the best way of life.You can buy everything,watch everything,
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 everything.But is it
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real
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happiness
?Our lives started to be so automatistic that we just have to lie on the sofa and waste our time and money.As far as
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 am concerned,
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computer
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the computer
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 was
disegned
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designed
 to solve some kinds of
mathimatic
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mathematic
mathematical
mathematics
 problems.In our
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century
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 it is hard to
image
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 that
computer
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 was designed only for solving
the
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problems.Now it is
one
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 of the most
importand
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important
part
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 of world economics.Companies can make plenty of
trasg
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trash
 ads and just spam them,in any
wayses
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way
 they will make
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money.
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computers
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 and www have lots of upsides.The
first
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one
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 and maybe
main
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 reason why people are using
computers
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is
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 that searching for information is much faster than spending hours in the library.
Styding
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Styling
 on the
computer
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 is much better than making the same work but on the phone.I am a new PC user so
i
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definatly
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definitely
 can say that
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computer
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the computer
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 is more comfortable than any other
tipes
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types
 of
sources
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. The
second
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one
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 is that you can make
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new friends.When you
scrule
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scroll
scale
scruple
 the internet everything is up to you.You can find lots of new interesting people from all spots
of
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 our planet.But
in
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 the other hand is that you can be fooled easily.Actually,
i
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cant
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can't
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 even know if you are
chating
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chatting
 with
pretty
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a pretty
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 girl which is in the picture or
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if is
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 it
a
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 old
kidnaper
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.When you chat with someone just be
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careful
carefull
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careful
 and
dont
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don't
 give personal information In my opinion,
computers
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 are
one
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 of the most important inventions of our time.They can do totally
everythinf
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everything
 now,but
dont
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don't
 forget that they will never replace humans in art
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because we have
a souls
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a soul
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Smart traffic management
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • Machine learning
  • Personalized treatment
  • Virtual classrooms
  • AI tutors
  • Smart homes
  • Energy consumption
  • Grocery shopping automation
  • Data analysis
  • Decision-making assistance
  • Efficiency
  • Mainstream adoption
  • Predictive algorithms
  • Personalization
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