Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Several folks contend that in
this
era various options are available. I either agree
nor
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disagree with
this
idea. In
this
essay, I will elaborate on my own reasons. On the one hand, during the
last
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there were several
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main milestones that revolutionized
human
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lifestyle. Advances in technology
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providing factories with high-tech
machineries
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.
Also
, according to convenient transportation raw materials is not the producer’s concern anymore.
furthermore
, due to globalization, multinational companies introduced new merchandise to many nations.
for example
, nowadays Nikes and Adidas
productions
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are available
in
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most countries’ shelves.
Therefore
, unlike local
manufactures
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that
is
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shown cultural identity, the global offering has increased people’s
option
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options
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in different markets.
on the other hand
, there are some special designers who dominate the world’s preferences by laying down their regulations and people from all around the world are forced to obey and consume these
productions
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. If they don’t purchase and use these products,
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others may consider them
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a narrow-minded person.
Moreover
, in
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market, renowned fashion designers are introducing
a specific styles
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specific styles
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or
colour
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each year.
For instance
,
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are taken down,
west-lines
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are
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in and
neck-lines
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are lowered
this
year and the prevalent colour is purple.
Therefore
, if people want to be up-to-date, they are supposed to choose the products
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in trend. to sum up,
although
introducing new materials increased
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of
manufactures
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manufacturers
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, choosing the products which are trend are more predictable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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