Day to day, there is a constant reminder of brands, products and services appearing in almost every aspect of our daily lives. The impacts of advertising, which in my view, has become so cleverly designed that it has had adverse effects on our well-being without people’s realisation.

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remains in our brains constantly.

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kind of

includes information about the brands,

company's

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brand-new products and services, and it appears in almost every aspect of our lives. These advertisements affect us seriously. By cleverly designed TV

commercials

, household members can be affected by

this

For example

, Mothers can buy

the

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100% orange juice which has advertised by

the

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Tropicana.

Also

, Fathers can buy a new MacBook Pro which has been advertised by Apple, to use in their work.

This

cault

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called

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imprint effect" researched and named by

Gildong

Hong

, a professor

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the

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Seoul National University.

Hong

speaks that cleverly designed

commercials

can imprint in our minds, and

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can be activated when we face a brand or product that we have seen in

the

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before. But

this

kind of

well made

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can harm our well-being and make us

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maximulists

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maximalists

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Hong

insist

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that 70% of consumers who

has

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watched

well made

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commercial bought 20% more products than

the

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normal people in a supermarket.

Furthermore

over consumption

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overconsumption

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can cause harmful effects

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an individual's financial situation. By the research of

Hong

and his co-researcher speaks 87% of the people who are

over consuming

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face financial issues. To escape

this

situation,

over

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consumer

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consumers

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should not be affected by

commercials

. They should act wisely when purchasing a product. In conclusion, well-made

commercials

can influence people's consumption patterns and most of them suffer from

over consumption

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overconsumption

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over

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consumer

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consumers

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shouldn't be affected by

commercials

so they can be a wise consumer.

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