Day to day, there is a constant reminder of brands, products and services appearing in almost every aspect of our daily lives. The impacts of advertising, which in my view, has become so cleverly designed that it has had adverse effects on our well-being without people’s realisation.

A well-made
advertisement
remains in our brains constantly.
This
kind of
advertisement
includes information about the brands,
company's
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brand-new products and services, and it appears in almost every aspect of our lives. These advertisements affect us seriously. By cleverly designed TV
commercials
, household members can be affected by
this
.
For example
, Mothers can buy
the
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100% orange juice which has advertised by
the
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Tropicana.
Also
, Fathers can buy a new MacBook Pro which has been advertised by Apple, to use in their work.
This
is
cault
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called
"Advertising
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the "Advertising
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imprint effect" researched and named by
Dr
Gildong
Hong
, a professor
of
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the
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Seoul National University.
Dr
Hong
speaks that cleverly designed
commercials
can imprint in our minds, and
it
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they
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can be activated when we face a brand or product that we have seen in
the
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advertisement
before. But
this
kind of
well made
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advertisement
can harm our well-being and make us
to
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be
maximulists
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maximalists
maximalist
.
Dr.
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Hong
insist
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that 70% of consumers who
has
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watched
well made
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commercial bought 20% more products than
the
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normal people in a supermarket.
Furthermore
,
over consumption
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overconsumption
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can cause harmful effects
to
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an individual's financial situation. By the research of
Dr
Hong
and his co-researcher speaks 87% of the people who are
over consuming
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face financial issues. To escape
this
situation,
over
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consumer
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consumers
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should not be affected by
commercials
. They should act wisely when purchasing a product. In conclusion, well-made
commercials
can influence people's consumption patterns and most of them suffer from
over consumption
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overconsumption
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.
Furthermore
,
over
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consumer
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consumers
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shouldn't be affected by
commercials
so they can be a wise consumer.
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