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Some people think visitors to others countries should imitate local customers and behaviours. Some people disagree; they think the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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Tourists
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 help the GDP of
communities
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. Many
communities
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 want
tourists
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 to come and explore their cultures and heritage. I believe
tourists
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 should imitate
locals
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' behaviours while some will argue that the host country should welcome cultural
differences
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.
Tourists
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 always bring diversity with them. We should appreciate that but
communities
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 with high culture dependent want tourist should follow their instructions to avoid damaging social sentiments.
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,
communities
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 like India, treat
tourists
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 as a god in their culture, but they
also
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 want
tourists
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 to imitate
locals
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. As in our,
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culture
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,culture
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 we follow some instructions to praise god-like wearing fully covered clothes etc. we want
tourists
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 to
also
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 follow the same to avoid the social sentiments of
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.
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 some argue that host
communities
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 should welcome cultural
differences
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.
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, In developed
communities
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 like America and Japan, People are secular, they loved people from different religions and admire them. These
communities
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 welcome cultural
differences
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. In conclusion, Developed
communities
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 usually welcome cultural
differences
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, but I strongly believe that in developing
communities
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,
tourists
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 should imitate
locals
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 in the host country .In developing
communities
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, we can be aware people of cultural
differences
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 .So that we all can live happily like brothers and sisters
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