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The table demonstrates ages,
in come
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income
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 and their relation to poverty in three
states
 in the USA. Overall, it is apparent that more of the citizens of
Utah
 are aged under 18, while those who are aged over 60 are in
Florida
. The average income per person appears to be almost the same in
California
 and
Florida
 at a median of $22500. Almost less than a fifth of the population in
California
 is below the poverty line, while
Florida
 and
Utah
 have a little less. In
California
 and
Florida
, a little less than a fifth of the
percentage
 of citizens are aged under 18, while
Utah
 appears to have the highest
percentage
 at 28
percent
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per cent
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. In these
states
, there are generally
less
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fewer
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 people aged under 60, excluding
Florida
.
California
 and
Utah
 have a combined
percentage
 of 21
percent
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per cent
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, which is beaten by
Florida
 by 2
percent
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per cent
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.
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As
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 I mentioned, the average income of individuals in
California
 and
Florida
are
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is
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 pretty similar,
however
,
Utah
 has
three quarters
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 of the
percentage
 that these 2
states
 have ( 17000 ). 16
percent
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 of the population of
California
are
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is
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 below the poverty line, which is the highest of the three
states
.
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