Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others, however, believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
These days, all technologies are developing, as well as, cell
phones
. People use
them more than other technology, especially children
. This
essay will be considered the pros and cons with examples of how children
should use
their phones
during the school day
.
On the one hand, cell phones
are updating day
by day
. Also
, not only the
elderly but Change preposition
for the
also
every
Change preposition
for every
children
and especially it is important for teenagers and they Change to a singular noun
child
use
a lot it during the school day
because their study connected with it. As well as, some people argue that kids should bring their phones
to school to keep in contact at every moment. Thus
, parents could keep track of what their children
are doing or if they have some problems. For example
, if a child is feeling sick, he or she can easily call or send a message to his or her parents.
On the other hand
, young people should not use
the phone during the
study time because it is Correct article usage
apply
detrimental
effect Correct article usage
a detrimental
to
their learning and life. Change preposition
on
For example
, they may lose to
attention during the lesson Change preposition
apply
that
is why the student does not listen enough, Correct pronoun usage
which
the
quality of the lesson can not be valuable. Correct word choice
and the
In addition
, they always think about social media such
as Instagram and Telegram. As a result
, they can not concentrate their mind.
In conclusion, although
, it will have a negative effect on their education, nevertheless
, it will be beneficial for them. If they use
the phone effectively in their leisure time.Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on
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