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some people say that students should be given more homework. Others say that children should be free to enjoy their youth. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #homework #children #youth
Homework is a major part of the whole learning process, and here is the question that people argue about its answer, should teachers assign
homworks
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homework
 to students to do in their free
time
, or
they
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do they
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 have to finish them together at
school
?
this
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the
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both views
,
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 and will represent the main
benifits
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benefits
 of letting free
time
for
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 these kids after
school
. People who agree with the idea of solving
excersices
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exercises
 at home
,
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 believe that
children
 will boost their knowledge and enhance what did they learn at
school
,
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 since the
time
 of the classes
are
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is
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 not enough to focus on the
individaul's
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individual's
 learning, and
this
 may lead to
forget
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forgetting
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 materials
the
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they
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 learn in the morning,
for example
, having a daily spelling
excersice
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exercise
 will help
children
 to memorise words rapidly. people who disagree with
this
, think that
the
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school
time
 is more than enough to teach
children
 science, math and languages, their point of view
that
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 there
is
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are
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 other skills
need
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 to be developed
in
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at
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this
 age like playing with neighbours to build strong communication skills,
also
 seizing
this
 free
time
 after
school
 in practising a sport like
football
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 or tennis, will let these kids having fit bodies. In conclusion, In my
opinion
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 I strongly recommend keeping free
time
to
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for
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 these
children
 after
school
, as they need
a
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high quality
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time
 with their
parent
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 at
this
 age,
where
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when
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 they keep in contact with them and
raising
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raise
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 some good
retuals
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rituals
 like
appreciate
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appreciating
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 family
time
.
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