Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general.

Recent years have raised the importance of having an efficient
work
-life balance, the key part of which is ensuring sufficient
time
is spent on free
time
activities outside
work
.
However
, paradoxically, the
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of those who dedicate
time
to their hobbies
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experienced a considerable downward trend, especially in the 21st century.
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the issue and its impact on
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society and individuals. To start with, the current century has brought significant changes to our lifestyles. The cost of living has doubled because of Covid,
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political context,
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ongoing international conflicts, and
economic
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crisis, which
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all affected our real income.
Consequently
, we were forced to commit more
time
to
work
to become able to earn more and cover significantly increased expenses.
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in turn has affected our
work
-life balance, reducing the
time
we spent on anything or anyone outside
work
. Unfortunately,
this
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several other issues. One evident consequence of the fact that individuals spend less
time
on their hobbies is the surged number of problems that we all experience. Not having
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to have some personal
time
enjoying doing different physical or mental activities,
such
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for example
, sports and games, drawing, gardening, hiking, or going to places of interest, raises the levels of stress,
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not allow us to unwind after
work
and leads to more serious health complications,
such
as depression, weakened immune system, and alleviated anxiety. Another impact of not having any To conclude,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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