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Some scientists think that there are intelligent life forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While it is sometimes believed that alien
life
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 that potentially exists on other planets should be contacted, others warn against doing
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. Even though alerting aliens to our existence might be asking for trouble, I believe that
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 is highly unlikely. In my opinion, we should try to contact extraterrestrial forms as they can bring technologies
enhancing
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 our
life
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. Searching
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life
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for life
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 beyond
Earth
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 can pose a threat to our existence
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if it turns out that we are not alone in the universe, we could contact hostile aliens who can attack us. If they can receive our messages, they can be potentially advanced enough, being our level of
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 or higher.
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, if
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 developed creatures misunderstand our peaceful intentions, they may see Earthlings as a threat and decide to come and destroy
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.
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, aggression is not likely to be their main
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 as they have figured out a way to manage their civilization for periods long enough to achieve the level of
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 needed for decoding our signals. Attempts to contact aliens are worthwhile as
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 can bring knowledge of the science and technology of an advanced extraterrestrial civilization that will accelerate the ability to live quality lives on
Earth
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. In case extraterrestrials are significantly more technologically advanced than we are on
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 today, they can share technologies and innovations improving
life
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 here on
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, highly-evolved intelligent
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life-forms
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 may teach humankind new agricultural technologies that can boost harvests to feed the growing population or share formulas of more sustainable fuels that do not pollute
air
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. Provided our levels of
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 are similar, we can still exchange information about our achievements which can be mutually beneficial. In conclusion, even though connecting with extraterrestrials that might have malicious intent can be letting the genie out of the bottle with unpredictable consequences, I strongly believe that making
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 contacts is essential as a great impact
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 can have on our technological
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 compensates potential risks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extraterrestrial
  • investigate
  • interstellar
  • speculate
  • communication
  • primitive
  • potential
  • collaboration
  • unlock
  • unprecedented
  • advancement
  • caution
  • consequences
  • hostile
  • unknowingly
  • civilization
  • disrupt
  • evolution
  • preserve
  • ponder
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