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Fewer and fewer people want to become teachers especially in secondary schools. Why this happening and what can be done to tackle this problem?

#people #teachers #schools
It is argued that the number of
people
 who choose
teaching
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to teach
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 as their occupation is decreasing due to a number of reasons and the government can take various actions in order to solve the problem.
To begin
 with,
as a result
 of the development of the technology and existence of social
media
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 it became difficult for younger and older to understand each other Because the gaps between
perspectives
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the perspectives
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 of previous and new generations
is
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 growing since the Youngs have more access to the internet and different narratives than what adults have been exposed to.
Therefor
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, therefor the two different age
group
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groups
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 adapted to lifestyles which are not the same and it makes it difficult to communicate or understand each other which may lead
into
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 turning teaching into a more demanding job.
For instance
, schoolchildren and teenagers learned from
the
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social media that it is important to show disagreement if they do not find an idea rational, while teachers might find it disrespectful.
In
contrast
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 the government can offer higher payments to
people
 who work as a teacher in order to increase their job satisfaction and encourage
people
 to teach at schools since
high income
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 jobs tend to be more popular among
people
.
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, in Germany, after
the
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world war 2 federal authorities increased the payment of
people
 who were teaching so they will not face any
problem
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problems
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 in terms of education. In conclusion, I would say that the lack of understanding because of
increasing
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the increasing
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 gap between
perspectives
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the perspectives
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 of
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the two
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two generation
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two-generation
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 has made teaching a demanding job and
government
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the government
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 can address the problem of
decline
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a decline
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 in the number of teachers by
baying
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paying
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 them more
wage
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wages
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.
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