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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT PARENTS SHOUL ENCOURAGE THEIR CHILDREN TO TAKE PART IN ORGANIZED GROUP ACTIVITIES IN THEIR FREE TIME. OTHERS SAY THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO LEARN HOW TO OCCUPY THEMSELVES ON THEIR OWN. DISCUSS BOTH THESE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR ON OPINION.

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It is often argued that parents should have their offspring partake in organizational activities, while others might propose that
children
 are encouraged to solve problems by themselves.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and conclude a logical conclusion. On the one hand,
children
 taking a part in organized
team
 projects can help them improve their
team
 player ability as it is an important interpersonal skill.
For example
, being in a
team
 benefits them to grasp the value of taking other people's opinions as equal
such
 as in the working environment.
Besides
 that, doing a certain project with grouping systems allows them to practice real-life situation and
also
 expose them
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 different type of conditions which are significant in building valuable character.
On the other hand
,
children
 being left alone most of the time may
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 them to be more self-resilient.
However
, it leads them to develop more individualistic and selfish tendencies.
For example
,
children
 that are secluded most of the time tend to be aggressively competitive when they grow up. Other than that, lack of exposure
in
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 eligible grouping projects creates a risk of them
to be
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 antisocial,
hence
, it influences
in
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bad mannerisms and lack of respect for other people.
Finally
, despite many claims that
children
 should be left alone to help them in self-problem-solving, I have only seen many positive results in letting
children
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be involved in organized group activities. To conclude, I believe that parents should let their
children
 take a part in an organization that includes social activities to help them increase their
team
 player capabilities and experienced real-life crucial situations.
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