Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects?

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plenty of
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use computers
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and
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many children have access to play
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games
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. The main negative impact of playing
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games
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is
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the deterioration
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of health and we can solve
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the drawbacks
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which
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that
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computer
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games
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can give and how can we solve
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,
video
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games
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can give a multitude of
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to children and
people
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. Mainly,
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games
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can give
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problems with health
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poor eyesight, posture curve,
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and so on. These problems were caused by not complying with the rules of sitting at the
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.
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,
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to be
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stuck a lot of
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behind
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a
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can feel stress and self-doubt since
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the brain
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brain
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brains
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of those
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cannot distinguish the
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from reality.
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, the
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main
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is
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game
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addiction. Because
people
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cannot get out of the
game
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and just get stuck on the
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all day.
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, 10% of all
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game
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players are addicted.
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, it becomes a global
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among
people
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and especially among children.
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, we have
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numerous
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methods to solve
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First
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of all,
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should set a
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to control themselves. They should play
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games
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2-3 hours in
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the day
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.
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is the best
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for gamers.
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they should look at the monitor at a distance of 50 cm and keep a smooth posture not to worsen health.
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, producers of
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should set
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when
people
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play their
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there
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should pop up
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notices
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about
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and about rules to sit on a
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correctly. In conclusion,
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addiction of
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global
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among
people
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.
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, please to these measures we can solve
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • obesity
  • eye strain
  • inappropriate content
  • social skills
  • isolation
  • academic performance
  • time limits
  • parental supervision
  • age-appropriate
  • physical activities
  • digital literacy
  • balanced computer usage
  • excessive gaming
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