teelevision is dangerous because it destorus family life and any sence of community; instead of visiting people or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Televisions throughout the years have developed and had various versions along the way. The TV most
people
use today
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the most advanced
technology
, and they can watch almost anything on it with the help of the internet via wifi. In my opinion, having a big screen and not having divided hours to watch with families, causes a rift between everyone.
Firstly
,
technology
was introduced for the benefit of humankind, so we could acquire ease with our day-to-day tasks and make our
life's
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more convenient, but
this
also
presents itself with some disadvantages.
Additionally
, one of the major problems with the use of
technology
and TV is that
people
forget that they have a life to live outside the screen.
For example
, the majority of young children nowadays are afraid of social interactions and grow to be antisocial.
Secondly
, because the
technology
was created by humans we
also
hold the power to control it.
While
the distractions are real and not many
people
are strong enough to fight the urge it can still be controlled.
For instance
, as observed through surveys done by the UK
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of
education
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, children who spend most of their school learning experience on tablets or
iPad
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iPads
tend to drift from reality and many end up having depression, anxiety and ADHD. In conclusion, visiting
people
and having conversations are important to human mental stability.
Also
, sharing emotions and problems becomes easy when
people
are face-to-face talking and interacting. In my opinion, the time on interactive boards and many
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items should be limited and
further
,
this
time should be used in more open human interactions.
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