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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicls will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicls #passengers #vehicles #outweight
Nowadays, There is a
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serious
 debate on
driverless
 cars and these vehicles will move passengers without any driver. While there are some drawbacks
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 with
driverless
 machines. I believe the main benefits are more
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substantial
. On the one hand, a
potentiale
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potential
 disadvantage of
this
 type of
cars
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 can
be cause
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 increase
the
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 number of unemployed.
In other words
, people can
loose
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 their jobs
such
 as public transport
driver’s
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drivers
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.
Also
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 individuals can become too
relaint
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reliant
 on technology. In my personal
experince
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experience
, one of my
friend
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 use computer
algoritms
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algorithms
 to do their job and after
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, once her system had a technical problem she does not even remember her task
how
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and how
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 can do it.
On the other hand
, a primary benefit
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driverless
 car is
robats
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robots
 do not have
emotion
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.
Although
, they can not impress by human
behaivour
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behaviour
 so they do not make mistakes. And
also
these kind
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 of cars can reduce the number of
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an accident
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accident
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accidents
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where
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that
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 happened by human error
such
 as bad habit driver and
careless
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.
Thus
, they can drive better than
human
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humans
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 even in bad
conditian
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condition
conditions
 like as bad
wheather
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weather
 and bad
visible
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. In
additian
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addition
, using
driverless
 public
transports
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 can reduce
cost
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of
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for
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 governments.
Moreover
, can enhance
the
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public
transports
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. On balance, It is true
driverless
vehcials
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vehicles
vehicle
 would
seems
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 disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
, I believe the positive effects in
term
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 of automation can decrease human errors and can develop
conditian
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condition
conditions
 of driving and
also
 can lead to
develop
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 the public transport and
the
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governments can save more money through using
driverless
trasports
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transports
transport
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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