In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicls will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, There is a serious debate on
driverless
cars, and these vehicles will move passengers without any driver. At the same time, there are some drawbacks associated with
driverless
machines. I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On the one hand, a potential disadvantage of
this
type of car is that it can cause an increase in the number of unemployed.
In other words
, people can lose their jobs,
such
as public transport
driver
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.
Also
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individuals can become too reliant on technology. In my personal
experince
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experience
, one of my
friend
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use computer
algoritms
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algorithms
to do their job and after
year
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, once her system had a technical problem she does not even remember her task
how
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can do it.
On the other hand
, a primary benefit
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driverless
car is
robats
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robots
do not have
emotion
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.
Although
, they can not impress by human behaviour
so
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they do not make mistakes. And
also
these kind
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of cars can reduce the number of
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an accident
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accident
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where
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happened by human error
such
as bad habit driver and
careless
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.
Thus
, they can drive better than humans even in bad
condition
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conditions
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like as bad weather and bad
visible
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.
In addition
, using
driverless
public transport can reduce the cost
of
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governments.
Moreover
, can enhance
the
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public
transports
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. On balance, It is true
driverless
vehicles would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
, I believe the positive effects in terms of automation can decrease human errors and can develop
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the condition
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condition
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of driving and
also
can lead to
develop
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the public transport and
the
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governments can save more money through using
driverless
trasports
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transports
transport
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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