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Public health is becoming an urgent issue nowadays. Some argue that governments should create nutrition and food choice laws to improve public health, while others believe that it is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#health #argue #governments #nutrition #food #choice #laws #matter #responsibility
In today's globalized, urbanised and
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over-populated world,
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 of
individuals
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 becoming an alarming issue. Few people believe that public
health
 improvement should be done by
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, whereas others think that It should be
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the individuals
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individuals
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 choice and responsibility. I will discuss
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both views and reasons for my inclination with my opinion
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articulated in
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 paragraphs. Looking at a former view, nowadays, people are consuming mostly
junkfood
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junk food
, which majorly consist of fatty acid and bad cholesterol, due to that the
health
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individuals
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deteriorate
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 day by day. And so for that
government
 need to intervene in
this
peonomenon
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phenomenon
 and have to tackle it by spreading awareness about
cons
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 of fast
food
 and
pros
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the pros
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 of healthy
food
nutritions
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nutrition
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.
Moreover
, the quality of the
food
 should be regulated as per the standard instruction of what and how to use them. To cite an example, recently, The
government
 of England announced strict laws on
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 of oils, which consist
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 fatty
acid
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 and bad cholesterol. So
that is
 why
government
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the government
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 should intervene and make strict laws to enhance public
health
. Looking at
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latter
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 view, every person is living a
hactic
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hectic
 life
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now and for
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 they did not give importance to their
health
 and ended up
as
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being ill. If
one
 is want to improve their
health
,
they
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 should
be
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focus on healthy
food
, which are rich in nutrition as well as
in
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vitamin.
In addition
,
one
have
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 to spend
one
's time on
exercise
 apart from orse's busy schedule. So that can improve
one
's
health
. Provided that
individuals
 focus on healthy
food
 and add some
exercise
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 their daily routine, they could enhance their
health
. In my opinion, each and every individual should focus more on
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 diet and some brisk
exercise
. In Conclusion,
Although
government
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 can impose some strict laws for improving public
health
,
Individuals
. should be focused more on their personal choice and
exercise
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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