Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Perhaps the idea of in

this

modern era a lot of manufactured meal and drink products contain high levels of sugar which

causes

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many health issues.Sugary goods should be more

coslty

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costly

to encourage humans to consume less

this

item.Many people

holding

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different beliefs

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it.

Personally

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I definitely with the

above expressed

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statement and there are many compelling reasons to support my view.In

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following essay, I intend two reasons

of

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this

.

First

and foremost,one of the main advantages is that if some companies made more expensive sugary goods.Many humans

to

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consume less

this

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type of

products

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,because if we consume sugar a lot,we face-to-face some problems belong to our health.They are very harmful

for

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us.

For instance

,if we consume sugary meals or drinks,it causes outweigh.Especially,

this

is too harmful

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our

body

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.

In addition

,sweets are

enemy

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for

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our teeth.

On the other hand

,there are some drawbacks.

That is

to say,if sweets are essential for us,we can not buy them,because they are very expensive.Yet,they are too necessary for like birthday parties.

That is

why

,

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some parents worry about it.

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is the reason,all humans

not

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rich.

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to

say

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they

have

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not enough money to buy them for some special occasions.

Moreover

,some people need to sweety things for their health. By way of my conclusion,sugar need for all things.

However

,there are a lot of drawbacks.For

this

reason,I once again reaffirm my position,it is

undoubtly

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undoubtedly

true that

,

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we do not frequently use

this

kind of

things

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.