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Some people believe that parents have a great influence on thechildren's growth but influence from the outside plays a moreimportant role. Do you agree or disagree?

Influence can be good or bad. Some people think that people have a great influence on children's growth but the influence from the outside plays a more important role.
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 essay will discuss whether it is a good option to get affected by our parents or the outside world. Nowadays parents have great control over their kid's life until they start making their own life choices. From the age of 1 to 18 adults have the right to shape their offspring's future, they try to give them all the knowledge they have acquired from their own experience and support them by securing their time ahead. Upgradation of skills is necessary later in
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 limited and bound by all the limitations as they are busy making their lifestyle. So teenagers seek help from other sources available outside their parent zone which can be their teachers, professors, books internet and many more.If some young adults get into bad company, they can be implication and be bad later on,
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 can easily get access to bad things the universe is filled with negative and positive, and the danger is as easy to find as safety is In my conclusion, I partly agree on
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 stage they need exposure from society to grow.

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