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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#year #languages #people #life #world
Language
 is one of
important
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 aspects
in
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 human life. As the earliest tool of communication, people can state what is on their
mind
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minds
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 to their peers of the same
language
.
Time
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 to time,
languages
 continue to develop, and
this
 process is inevitable. From
this
 event, it is clear that
languages
 develop in order to survive. If a
language
 does not develop, it will have a lower chance to survive. In my opinion, when a
language
 dies, it can cause some difficulties for humankind. A
language
 represents the
history
 of the
speakers
.
Languages
 are the product of the
speakers
, especially from a historical point of view. To arrive at a certain point of development or change, a
language
 is affected by the historical movement. To give
this
 statement a clear image,
English
 is an example of a
language
 which represents its
history
. Back in Old
English
 Era,
this
 West Germanic
language
 did not prioritize word order whether it was a written sentence or spoken. The phenomenon happened because Old
English
 used
inflections
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However
, Old
English
 started to change as it was influenced by foreign
languages
. Due to invasions from other nations and wars, Old
English
 was gradually changing. We can understand from
this
 example that humankind can acquire knowledge about
history
 by learning a
language
, especially its development. To understand to importance of
languages
 at a deeper level, we should remember that it is important to preserve a
language
 because there might be a new discovery found written in a certain
language
. Chinese,
for example
, is one of the oldest
languages
 in the world.
This
language
 is able to survive for thousands of years, mainly because of development. The existence of
Chinese
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language
 helps its
speakers
 to learn about traditional Chinese medicine which contributes to the growth of modern medicine.
This
 case provides a solid argument that keeping a
language
 away from its death is a serious matter. There is a downside to a death of a
language
, specifically for researchers when they are trying to study
about
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a certain topic. If a
language
 dies, there might be
a difficulties
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difficulties
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 in acquiring new
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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. Namely, Latin is a dead
language
 because the
speakers
 left the
language
. Because of
this
, many manuscripts and dossiers written in Latin need more time to decipher. There is a chance that a dead
language
 could erase its culture from
the
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history
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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