Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Hobbies
are very common and
people
love to spend
time
learning and developing
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their extraordinary skills.
These day
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, some
people
allot
time
for
activites
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activities
that they like to do
at
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free
time
. In
this
essay, I will explain what I think of
this
statement and
the
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effects on a person and society. Personally, I find
hobbies
have a great influence
in
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on
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ourselves
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us
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.
Firstly
, these activities that we are
intrested
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interested
in
helps
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help
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us to stay distracted from our busy lives and schedules.
Moreover
, they bring purpose to our life, by improving our methods and tactics while performing them.
Secondly
, These devotions
enhances
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the development of our skills and talents, because while we perform we tend to research for better ways or to try learning from a professional.
For example
, I had a hobby of playing
drums
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the drums
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and
this
made me
more happy
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because when I spend too much
time
for play
this
instrument,
and
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I try to improve my skills.
Also
,
this
kept me away from anxiety and pressure from my workplace. For an individual,
hobbies
play an important role in their lives. Mainly, after a hectic day of work
people
get to spend some
time
in
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doing things that they love. By, devoting their
time
for
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hobbies
, a person feels more relaxed and
stress free
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, especially when they go through daily work pressure. In societies,
people
of similar
intrests
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interests
tries
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try
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to bring
adventours
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adventurous
events to the communities, to help raise funds or charities.
Moreover
, these
people
will stay more connected during
this
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these
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programmes. In conclusion, devoting
time
for
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to
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hobbies
will be really helpful for
people
who are undergoing
through
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anxiety and stress. For,
this
stays us occupied with multiple
activites
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activities
.
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