some people think that giving gifts and presents to friends and family is important to show them that we care. Others think that there are better ways to show affection to them. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion?

There is no doubt nowadays giving
gifts
between
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people
is a common thing in our societies. The question is, is giving
gifts
to
friends
and family
is
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essential to appear our
care
for them or there are many ways to show that
.
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In
this
essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of causes, some
people
believe that the only
way
to express
the
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love or
care
for anyone is
giving
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by giving
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gifts
to them. The main reason giving to support
this
claim is that the capability to buy
gifts
it
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makes
people
giving
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presents
between
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them
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themselves
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. To illustrate, it is not necessary
purchase
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expensive
gifts
for your friend or family, to express
for
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your
care
towards them. The value of
gifts
should be moral and not material. So, the majority of
people
choose
this
way
because it is considered
easier
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way
and depends on
level
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of income individual.
However
, other
people
believe that there
are
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better
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a better
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way
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to show them what we
care
.
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Firstly
, spending enjoyable time with
friends
or family
that is
meaning of love and
care
.
Secondly
, buying expensive
gifts
that maybe appear
discriminate
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between
friends
and members of
family
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the family
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.
Additionally
,
hang
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out,
go
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going
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shopping and giving a cinema ticket
for
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who
care
about them, it maybe
be
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more expression
for
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of
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meaning
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the meaning
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of
care
. In conclusion, in my opinion, there is no specific
way
to show that
care
towards
friends
or family. Everyone can choose the
way
which
convenient
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is convenient
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to
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for
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them whether by giving
gifts
or the other ways which we mentioned above.
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