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You organised a 90th birthday party in a hotel for a relative. Many elderly guests attended this party which of grand success. Write a letter to thank the hotel manager. In your letter, Give details of party the reasons why party was successful Mention a staff member who helped you a lot

#birthday #party #hotel #guests #success #manager #staff #member
Dear sir or madam, I am writing
this
 letter to thank you and your crew. We did gather up to celebrate my
grand father
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grandfather
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 90's birthday in Sunset Hotel
at
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last
saturday
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Saturday
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 and your crew did a great job. A lot of elder people
came
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this
 party so I requested
for
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some special treatment especially helping them
to
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with
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 their needs kindly. Party has an Italian theme as my
grand father
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grandfather
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 was born in Italy but he had to immigrate and couldn't go back so he miss his culture.
Decorations
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The decorations
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 were amazing and
foods
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the foods
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 are even better! The cake's
colors
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 were red, green and white like the Italian flag, my family
is love
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this
 detail. Everyone enjoyed their meal and the environment was
quiet
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quite
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cosy
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and cosy
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. I have to thank
spesificly
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specifically
Mrs.
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Mrs
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 Philips because she was really helpful to my
grand mother
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grandmother
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. She helped her to
walking
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walk
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 when I wasn't around her. My nanny said
that
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how kind she is. Yours faithfully, Elif Beyza Önder
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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