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Money spent on space exploration is a complete waste. Governments could better spend this money money on other things to benefit the nation . To what extent do you agree or disagree

#money #space #exploration #waste #governments #benefit #nation
Space
 exploration is
the
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 exciting activity among powerful
countires
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countries
. Spending money on exploring
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space
 would be worthless and it had better use for the country's benefit. In my opinion, I quite disagree that it is a total waste
money
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of money
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 for
space
mission
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missions
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 because it would lead to
figure
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figuring
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 out how the universe works and
develop
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developing
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the
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future technology for
human
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humans
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.
To explore
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Exploring
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 the
Earth
 outside,
It
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requires a large budget for the exploration. The outside world is completely different from the
earth
 because it does not have oxygen for life. It needs to have
support
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a support
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 machine to produce the gas for breathing.
In addition
, The radiation would
be
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affect directly to the pilot's body and would be
harm
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for
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to
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skin
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the skin
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 and metabolism.
Therefore
, it requires
the
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 specific suit for the
space
 team.
Moreover
, not just the rocket but
supportive
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the supportive
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 machine that the government is to invest in is very expensive. These costs are reasonable for the
space
 activity. The many advantages of the mission beyond the
Earth
 are worth it
to spend on
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spending
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. Nowadays,
the
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scientist is likely to precisely predict the weather because the
statellites
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satellites
,
for instance
, around the world collect
the
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weather data continuously and send
to
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it to
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 the
earth
 .
This
 technology is
achevement
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achievement
 because of
the
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space
techonology
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technology
. The
space
 station
also
use
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uses
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 solar light to
procuce
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produce
the
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power
by
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from
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 solar cell. It would reduce the cost
for
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of
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 fuel and
the
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energy production. In conclusion, The budget
on
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for
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the
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space
 exploration is essential for people and
environment
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the environment
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 in the future. All countries would like to invest in renewable energy and find a solution for
the
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climate change. That's why the outside
Earth
 would be
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to be the
next
 step for
human
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humans
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • complete waste
  • benefit the nation
  • technological advancements
  • foster
  • international cooperation
  • inspire
  • engage
  • boost the economy
  • long-term benefits
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