-Some people believe that we should have a four-day working week and still be paid the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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salary. And I totally agree with

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improve

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industry

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can

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they have to

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time than traditionally they use to do and

reciving

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decision can

also

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beneficial

for companies if they make

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way

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just four

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per

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then

, the electricity and other

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expenses

of it can be cut down drastically.

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for just one

employee

company

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the company

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can save thousands of

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in a year which it can put

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law is in consideration in the UAE, and citizens of that country are welcoming

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organisation

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can boost their production and can deliver their services faster.

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some

drawback

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system.

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, companies have to pay

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according to

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week

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this

can cost them millions of

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, putting pressure on

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organistaion

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organisation

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this

and some other disadvantages can

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. In conclusion, I believe making 4

days

week

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will totally be a good idea for both

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sides and minute drawbacks can be neglected since

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this

is a win-win situation for everyone.

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