-Some people believe that we should have a four-day working week and still be paid the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, a
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person
working five
days
a
week
for long hours for a
priavte
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private
company or the
goverment
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government
is
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normal
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and
everyones
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everyone's
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life
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.But chuck of people
argue
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that
,
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working
days
shoould
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should
be reduce
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to four and should get
same
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salary. And I totally agree with
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them
that
theme
, because of
myriad
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benifits
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benefits
not
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,not
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just
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for
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the comapany
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comapany
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company
but
also
for
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the employee
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employee
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employees
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.
Further
,
passage
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will elaborate details of
this
statement. To knock off, advantages for companies, if four
days
week
will start all around the world,
this
can in my
opion
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opinion
,
imporve
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improve
the productivity of
employee
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the employee
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.
Peoples'
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in
industry
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the industry
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can
work
more
enthusiatically
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enthusiastically
. Since
,
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they have to
work
for
shorter
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a shorter
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time than traditionally they use to do and
reciving
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receiving
the same salary.
This
decision can
also
be
benificial
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beneficial
for companies if they make
law
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laws
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by
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in
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various
way
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ways
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.
Such
as, if an
employee
have
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to
work
just four
days
per
week
then
, the electricity and other
expeneses
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expenses
of it can be cut down drastically.
Where
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for just one
employee
,
company
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the company
a company
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can save thousands of
ruppes
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rupees
in a year which it can put
in
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into
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other thing
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.
This
law is in consideration in the UAE, and citizens of that country are welcoming
this
desicio
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decision
.
In addition
,
this
law can encourage
many
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youth
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youths
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to
work
for private
or
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apply
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organisation
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organisations
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. Thinking about working
hour
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hours
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, and since youth can
work
for
longer
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a longer
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period
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periods
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in
camparison
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comparison
to
older
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the older
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experienced
worker
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workers
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.
This
can boost their production and can deliver their services faster.
However
, there
are
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some
drawback
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drawbacks
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of
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to
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this
system.
For instance
, companies have to pay
worker
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workers
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,
according to
5
days
week
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a week
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. And
this
can cost them millions of
dollar
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dollars
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, putting pressure on
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the organistaion
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organistaion
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organisation
.
Although
,
this
and some other disadvantages can
be outweigh
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be outweighed
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. In conclusion, I believe making 4
days
week
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a week
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will totally be a good idea for both
the
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sides and minute drawbacks can be neglected since
,
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this
is a win-win situation for everyone.
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