Some people believe that the society should be based on rules and laws. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It's argued that
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the shape of countries directed by
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the opinions of those who want the opposite. First of all, there is a huge proportion of society
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that being
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from human being inside, not being forced by the authorities, if individuals have
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morals and
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good attitude,
then
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will become useless, since their behaviours are becoming from their hearts,
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not matter if there are cameras on the roads or not, if the driver believes that he should stop when it's red,
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it means nothing if he is being watched or not. In my opinion, regulars should be essential and main part of the shape of
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community today, and
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it to people good
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intention
will lead to many future disasters , because there is no guarantee that the whole people have the same
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and the degree of sticking to them,
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, studies that concern about
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comparing
the degree of following the rules between countries that stick to the
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laws
and others don't, show that
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accidents
and murders rates are higher in communities with no
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clear
rules. In conclusion, countries should take some serious steps toward
laws
application, like relying on social media content, billboards in stadiums and
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to make people aware of the
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of
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applying
the rules to protect themselves
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and
the ones they love.
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