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Scientist and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extend do you agree?

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Introduction
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people
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 liked science and technology exports We helping
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our
country
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research
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 etc than musicians.
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in
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present us very much help discuss in
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 they
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 explain and
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 about the
future
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.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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Scientists
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 help us and provide detail
about
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 the same time. Who made things to provide
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information about the present
.
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Body paragraph 2
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 in India
mostly
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scientists
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 make chemical reactions and etc things that
useful
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are useful
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 in our
country
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.
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People's
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beleive
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believe
technological
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in technological
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 experts They
giving
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 advice and
helped
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people
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.
Body paragraph 3
Seeing new things about our present life and
people
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's suggest spend in your life.
Body paragraph 4
Moreover
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.very good individuals
in
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and in
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 our
country
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 and experts. That useful
importce
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importance
 in our life.Who explain
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future
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 very well and
more
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have more
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 knowledge sharing with
persons
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people
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india
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pakistani
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Pakistani
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 in 2014 but
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 technological resources and
experts
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an experts
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 team that catch in Kashmir.
Body paragraph 5
Most
of
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studies
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the studies
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 have found
scientists
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 and
they
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apply
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very
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are very
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 good
to
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for
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 us. They work hard
to
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for
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 their
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country
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country's
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indian
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Indian
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scientists
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scientists'
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solution
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 when
problem
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problems
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come
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in
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to
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 India.
Body paragraph 6
In conclusion.
i
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 am agreement with
this
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 point.
Conclusion
In
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future
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 and present
scientists
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 when
us
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we
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 need
scientists
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they
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apply
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help very much from their heart.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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