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Some people says that free space in city and town should used to plant trees while some says that construction should be done. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #space #city #town #plant #trees #construction
In
this
 modern era, finding free available space is very rare
due to
 overpopulation.
However
, some folks concur that empty land in
an urban and rural areas
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urban and rural areas
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 should impose the plant trees. Other people reject
this
 notion and are convinced that construction should be done. From my perspective, I tend to stand with the latter statement
due to
 a plethora of reasons. I will expand on more detail in the forthcoming paragraph. The top-notch concrete reason is that the increasing
the
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apply
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population
due to
 no birth control which
have
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 led to demands for accommodation.
Therefore
, fulfilling the house requirements is a burden on the local authorities.
In addition
 to
this
, most people are living in slum areas and
continously
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continuously
 caught from various diseases. So,
government
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the government
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 should convert empty spaces into construction
area
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areas
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. I
On the other hand
, climate change and global warming are the worrying concern for the whole world
due to
man-kind
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mankind
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 activities. To deal with
this
 issue, the government should plant trees in place of free available space.
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