Being a celebrity - such as a movie star or professional athlete - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity has more benefits or drawbacks?
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the majority
a majority
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the worldwide
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population
believe
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it
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well known
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well-known
people
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from the
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a
their
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and their
is
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are
headlines
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headline
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Johnny
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people
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most
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more
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commerical
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commercial
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announcement
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well known
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well-known
people
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trend
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a trend
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actors
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shows
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idole
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in conclusion, Correct your spelling
idol
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the majorty
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majority
well-known
person, I believe being famous, Correct article usage
a well-known
bring
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