The charts below show the percentage of Australian men and women in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentage of Australian men and women in three age groups who were employed in 1984, 2001 and 2014.
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The graph compares the proportion of male and female employees In Australia in 1984,2001 and 2014
accordingly
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to their age.Significant differences between these gender groups are evident. As can be seen from the bar chart middle-aged workers prevailed across all the
years
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and ages,except women in 1984,when the proportion was almost equal with teenagers,just under 60%.It is noticeable,that the least share was in the oldest age category.
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,in 2014 it slightly outnumbered the youngest one reaching the point of 60%. Looking into details,in 2001 the statistics for men and women followed a similar pattern,
whereas
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fifteen
years
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before,it had some differences.
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,there were
less
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fewer
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35-44
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old female workers compared to those,under 20
years
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old, though for male ones it was the opposite.As the data suggests,in 2014 there teen female employees were
second
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highest after the group of 35-44, in sharp contrast to their male counterparts.
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