Some people say that when deciding how taxes should by spent, the government should prioritize health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some
people
believe that health
care
should be number
one Correct article usage
the number
sector
that government
Correct article usage
the government
support
Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
by
tax spent, in Change preposition
through
this
essay I will elaborate, how
I Change preposition
on how
support
this
statement and disagree.
To began
with, Change the form of the verb
begin
government
should Add an article
the government
be prioritize
Change the verb form
prioritize
health
care
because it is the
vital Correct article usage
a
sector
in every country
. If people
have a healty
body, they can do anything from studying Correct your spelling
healthy
untill
working. Correct your spelling
until
However
, if something bad happen
like pandemic COVID 19, the other Change the verb form
happens
sector
to be paralyze
. Wrong verb form
paralysed
People
can not doing
anything when the Change the verb form
do
be doing
government
applied
lockdown, and it Wrong verb form
applies
is required
a lot of money to Wrong verb form
requires
support
it. Second,
government
Add an article
the government
also
responsible Add a missing verb
is also
to provide
Change preposition
for providing
the
Correct article usage
apply
hospital
with high technology Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
equipments
, and as we know they are very expensive. Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
For instance
, CT-scan machine
and patient's Fix the agreement mistake
machines
bed
with many Fix the agreement mistake
beds
fiture
are the most Correct your spelling
features
future
expensive's
Change noun form
expensive
equipments
that Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
hospital
need.
Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
However
, other
Change the wording
another sector
other sectors
sector
also
Add a missing verb
are also
substantial
Change the word
substantially
to
Change preposition
apply
support
by tax
. First is Add an article
the tax
the
education. Correct article usage
apply
Government
should focus Correct article usage
The government
in
Change preposition
on
this
sector
to prepare young
generation to become future Add an article
the young
leader
by Fix the agreement mistake
leaders
provide
basic education for free, so that anyone, Change the verb form
providing
include
poor Wrong verb form
including
peolpe
, can be smart. And Correct your spelling
people
also
by providing scholarship
for students who have outstanding academic Fix the agreement mistake
scholarships
score
so that they could Fix the agreement mistake
scores
achive
their dream and contribute more to their Correct your spelling
achieve
country
. Next,
the infrastructure sector
might as
important as Add a missing verb
be as
health
care
. As we know people
can run everyday life because of good infrastructure provide
by Change the form of the verb
provided
government
. It Correct article usage
the government
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
support
the Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
country
to run
the trading Change preposition
in running
sector
such
as road to harbour or bridge from one island to another. When the catastrophe happen
, it Wrong verb form
happened
also
required a lot of money from tax
to build the Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
country
as it is
before.
Wrong verb form
was
To sum up
, I agree to
the statement, Change preposition
with
the
Correct determiner usage
that
health
care
is the most important sector
because if people
Add a missing verb
are healty
healty
they Correct your spelling
healthy
could
do anything and run their Wrong verb form
can
life
, Fix the agreement mistake
lives
also
the health
care
equipments
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
are
expensive.Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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