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Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficlult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antartica. What are benefits or disadvantages for tourists visiting such places?

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In the contemporary era, there is
rise
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 in travellers who travel to pristine destinations,
such
 as
Sahara
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the Sahara
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 Desert or
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Antartica
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Antarctica
. The essay shall depict that one of the merits is
to embrace
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 natural landscapes, and one of the drawbacks is to lack
of
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civilization. The main advantage is that tourists are
enable
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 to appreciate the beauty of nature. In the same way, most of these places do not
over establish
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 the number of facilities or amusement parks to attract foreigners.
Hence
, overseas people can immerse in the mountainous area or
wildness
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 ocean to appreciate its scenery. As an illustration,
Hawalii
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Hawaii
 has
the
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 well-known oceanic view and volcanic
extraodinary
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extraordinary
 sight, which contributes to more than ten thousand
of
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Canadians to stay vacation there.
As a result
, some crowds are willing to experience
original
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 environment to relax their minds and physical bodies. Inconvenient daily activities are
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 vital demerit in
this
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 undeveloped countries.
That is
 to say, the general public has already accustomed to
have
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 a quick way to do grocery shopping or go
dinning
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 out, but they are difficult to search for supermarkets or street
venders
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vendors
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 in
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proximity distance in these primitive locations. To point out, it is barely possible to have a convenience store in the village of
remote
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area
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 in Japan.
Consequently
, visitors are challenging to have an easy life in that unprogressive destination
too
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 long. In conclusion, having a magnificent natural view
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 by sightseers is
the
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 significant benefit to
visit
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visiting
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 these open
environment
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environments
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;
on the contrary
, life increasing difficulty in
everyday
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 routines is the chief pitfall of travelling in these ordinary regions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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