Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Do the Advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Education takes a long
period
in human life. Some societies believe that
students
should take a break from studying between high school and university, and travel or work for a short
time
. Other
people
think that pupils have to go to university immediately after graduation. I will discuss its benefits and drawbacks. Until to end of high school, we almost study 8 years without any breaks and after long years to study
students
need some
time
for relaxing or to do different activities. At young ages travelling abroad is more beneficial because
people
can realize different cultures and lifestyles at an early age,
therefore
this
experience gives them a variety of perspectives. Working might be a good benefit for them
due to
their need
such
as doing their daily activities in university or saving money for future expenses.
On the other hand
, giving a break between levels of education has some disadvantages too.
Firstly
,
students
will lose their concentration on studying after a
period
of
time
.
In addition
, their graduation years will be late
due to
their lose
time
working or travelling during an education
period
.
Secondly
, if
students
want to make abroad except to work, it will be over cost for their families.
Besides
these, working at younger ages would be discouraged for some
people
because of the bad treatment of employers. In conclusion, everything is good if we do it in the correct
period
of
time
. Some
people
might be required to make different decisions
however
as a human we shouldn't choose different ways till the expected
time
comes.
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