In the future, all cars, busses and vehicles will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles will outweight the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant exmaples.

The phenomenon of self-driving systems starting to replace the traditional human driver has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as people's views on
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issue in question may be, I believe that
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technology has more benefits than drawbacks for us. Regarding the disadvantages of controlling
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, probably the most significant one is that many people would
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job because computers take out
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their jobs. To illustrate, the maintenance cost of
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driving
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is much lower than normal hired drivers.
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, most transportation corporations would love to purchase the new technology as an alternative to
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human drivers.
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spending of living. Despite the aforementioned drawback, I still believe that the advantages of
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self-driving cars should be able to overcome the disadvantage. Of all the benefits, probably the first view pop-up in my mind is that the rate of
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will be reduced.
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occur because the driver feels tired after work or
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heart attack.
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self-driving systems
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being used popularly. Consequentially, the
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accident will be improved. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that safety and life security are much more essential than losing the current job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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