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Some people think that all entertainment TV programmes should educate people about the importance of social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #entertainment #tv #programmes #importance
Social
issues
 are important research topics
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 because they help
people
 to understand that there are many ways to think about and how to approach them. Some
people
 think that entertainment
TV
 programmes should educate
the
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people
 about the
essential
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 of social
issues
, as for me I agree
to
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 the point and elaborate more in
this
 essay. Nowadays, it is very crucial to know about social
issues
 and entertainment
TV
program
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programs
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 will help to spread awareness since numerous
people
 spend their leisure time watching, every program should
atleast
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at least
 room for any social issue to
tacle
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tackle
,
moreover
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 it is important to all the
people
 worldwide that these are something serious, like
for example
 the issue of child bullying. Not all
the
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people
knows
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 about it and there are still
people
 around us that are ignorant about the issue, teaching the therapeutic approach they should do if it happens to their children, so educating them through
tv
 is very helpful. There are
people
speacially
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specially
especially
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the
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rural areas where
internet
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 is not available or they cannot afford to pay internet connection, so the only way they will connect to the world is by watching
TV
, which is free and cheaper.These
people
 should
also
 know what is happening around them
,
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 so that they will know what to do and how to avoid
such
situation
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situations
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.
For example
 the farmers in
countryside
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they
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are not fully aware that the fertilizers that they are using
in
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 their farm will release nitrous oxide which is
a
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green
gases
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 that cause global warming. By inserting social
topic
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topics
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 in all entertainment
program
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programs
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 have
higher
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 chance for them to watch. In conclusion, educating
people
 about the importance of social
issues
 in all
TV
intertainment
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entertainment
 is a good thing to do, since
people
 love
wactching
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watching
 television and spend their
leizure
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leisure
 time with
this
specially
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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.
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