Some people think that all entertainment TV programmes should educate people about the importance of social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Social
issues
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because they help
people
to understand that there are many ways to think about and how to approach them. Some
people
think that entertainment
TV
programmes should educate
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people
about the
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of social
issues
, as for me I agree
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the point and elaborate more in
this
essay. Nowadays, it is very crucial to know about social
issues
and entertainment
TV
program
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programs
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will help to spread awareness since numerous
people
spend their leisure time watching, every program should
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at least
room for any social issue to
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tackle
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it is important to all the
people
worldwide that these are something serious, like
for example
the issue of child bullying. Not all
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people
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about it and there are still
people
around us that are ignorant about the issue, teaching the therapeutic approach they should do if it happens to their children, so educating them through
tv
is very helpful. There are
people
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the
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rural areas where
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is not available or they cannot afford to pay internet connection, so the only way they will connect to the world is by watching
TV
, which is free and cheaper.These
people
should
also
know what is happening around them
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so that they will know what to do and how to avoid
such
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situations
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.
For example
the farmers in
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they
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are not fully aware that the fertilizers that they are using
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their farm will release nitrous oxide which is
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green
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that cause global warming. By inserting social
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in all entertainment
program
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programs
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have
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chance for them to watch. In conclusion, educating
people
about the importance of social
issues
in all
TV
intertainment
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entertainment
is a good thing to do, since
people
love
wactching
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watching
television and spend their
leizure
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leisure
time with
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in
countryside
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the countryside
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