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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
people
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 tend to prioritize
work
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 over everything and they normally ignore the necessity of having downtime, because they consider it as an unimportant activity.
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, if
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 perspective continues, we can expect the stress levels of
people
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 will be enhanced and it
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 can lead them to burn out more easily which can lead to unproductivity. Having little
time
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 to do leisure
activities
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 may increase our stress levels gradually. It is very essential to have an adequate amount of
time
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 to do spare
activities
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 in order to make
people
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's minds refresh and become more relaxed.
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, many leisure
activities
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 are created to support
people
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 to have a better focus on their
work
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 and not be easily interrupted by any disruption.
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, doing yoga exercises is a great way to spend their free
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 because it can provide them with a good experience of relaxation.
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, if
people
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 do not have enough
time
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 to put their mind and their body to rest,
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 the level of their anxiety will be increased.
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, long hours of
work
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 can lead us to burn out and reduce our productivity. At the same
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,
people
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 like to call working for long hours a form of hard
work
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, even though the results that they obtained are not always the same as their goals. Despite
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, there are some benefits that can bring from long hours of
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,
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 as more tasks and
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 that can be done in a day, and increased income for employees from overtime pay.
To sum up
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, having an appropriate
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 to have spare
activities
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 is really important to avoid negative impacts on
people
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's minds. Because I strongly believe that leisure
activities
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 play an essential role in order to put
people
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's brains at ease to give them better
work
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 performance.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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