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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
It is a true fact that new technology in road
vehicles
 will emerge in
driving
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the driving
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role
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roles
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 so that people will get
a
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rid of
burden
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 despite driving .
To
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 my point of view, Changing
vehicles
into
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to
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 driverless is not a good option in today's world. People can take any kind of help to the driver
at
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in
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 any situation.
In addition
, Neither
vehicles
 nor machines are humans and it causes accidents. People will be in fear
in
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such
 road
vehicles
.
Moreoever
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Moreover
, it causes
lack
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 of job opportunities in
driving
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the driving
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 field in
coming
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the coming
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 years
as well as
 applying
license
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 for the purpose of driving in transportation may be reduced.
For instance
,
few
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 years ago, a test was conducted in the USA to check
driverless
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the driverless
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car
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cars
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 on road . After a few moments, it
bursted
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burst
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 automatically on account of
machine
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the machine
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 issue.
Finally
, the government should not develop
such
 kind of technology in the coming years without drivers. Machines will always not work properly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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