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In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this overweight the disadvantages?

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At present, it is true that more and more
parents
are mostly prefer
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home
 training
comparing
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compared
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 to the common
education
 for their
children
.
This
 statement has its own benefits and drawbacks for kids, which will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, there are several advantages of studying at
home
, under the control of
parents
. First of all,
home schooling
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homeschooling
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 provides individual training, which in turn helps pupils to easily understand new themes and quickly memorize data.
Secondly
, if
parents
 be a teacher
for
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 their
children
, they can share their own
experience
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, which should be useful for students in their future life and career.
Finally
, with the help of
home
education
 relationship between
children
 and
parents
 can be stronger, the reason is that they spend a lot of time with each other
by
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discussing and learning new information.
On the other hand
, in spite of
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pros
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its
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it
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also
 has cons. A good example
for
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this
 is kids who spend the whole day at
home
 without going out, they become weaker than their peers.
Additionally
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as a result
 of
home
education
children
 can't communicate with their coevals, which causes many problems related to the character. In conclusion, from my point of view common
education
 in schools is much
more
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better and equally beneficial for
children
.
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