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The best curriculum is not one based on a static body of knowledge but one which teaches students to cope with change. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#curriculum #body #students #change
It is indisputable fact that recently a lot of
people
 believe that
curriculum
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 are created for improving knowledge,
whereas
 the
opposants
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opponents
 argue that it
also
 utilized to change the students. I partially agree
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this
 view
due to
 the results and the actions
such
 as monitoring and evaluating. Some
people
 agree that
teaches
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 might cope with change. If the curriculum altered
people
, it might make
people
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practice
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their
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 daily basis. Resulting to
this
, they will have strong memory to have superb attitude, which
lead
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 to be a better person.
For example
, if
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youngsters
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about
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how to be kind
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 friends, and the teacher reveals
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how to do it, the young generations will remember it and implement it in the present and in the future.
On the other hand
, if all of the
subject
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 should
altered
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 the students,
it
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needs monitoring and
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the
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 programs effectively and efficiently.
Moreover
, it takes a long time period in order to change the youngsters' behaviour. To illustrate
this
, the teacher will not know whether the students execute all of the information that
have
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 been taught. Presumably,
this
 phenomenon must take a lot of
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 to enforce by the country.
To sum up
, I partially agree with the idea to make not only for knowledge but
also
 for alteration because of the advantages if it really happened and the implementation that should be monitored and evaluated.
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