Online shopping is significantly increasing what effect does this have people, what are the demerits and what are the job opportunities?

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In the contemporary world,
growing
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trend of online shopping is ubiquitous. In the subsequent
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I will elucidate the benefits, drawbacks, and
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jobs that online shopping is creating.  
To begin
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with, online shopping saves a lot of time. Earlier we had to go to the market and bring different
things
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from different shops. But now with the advent of online
shopping
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we can see a wide range of products
in
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on
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a single screen be it mobile or laptop and buy the
things
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of our choice in just
few
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clicks and get the
things
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delivered
at
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home.
Apart from
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this
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,
due to
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increasing
competition
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the shopping sites often give a good discount.
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, buying those
things
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online turns out to be pocket friendly.    
On the other hand
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, it has multiple drawbacks.
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, people are becoming more and more lethargic as they are getting everything
at
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in
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the comfort of their
home
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homes
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and don’t walk at all for shopping which used to be
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good exercise for our
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. Apart from that, many retailers and workers in retail shops have lost jobs
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the booming online shopping industry.  
Nevertheless
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, it has created many alternate jobs as well. In
IT
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the IT
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industry, software professionals design and maintain online shopping sites.
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, there are customer executives and delivery persons who are solely dependent on
this
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online shopping industry.   In conclusion, I would like to mention that though there are
few
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downsides but a good number of job generation and the customer facility that online shopping
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us are turning out to be highly beneficial for
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humankind.
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